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[fromcancertocapricorn]

Any feedback is welcome and much appreciated!




Long before scattered pages and cracked memories
made their home in these heart-houses,
there was a placed we each lived,
tattered and old, yet familiar. < I understand what you're trying to get at, but the words you use like "tattered and old, yet familiar" seem a little bit familiar themselves.
Before long it became a distant place, unreachable.


Suddenly, in the midst of hurling tides that rattled my core,
I washed upon your shores like a drunken boat at sea,
my livelihood became a mirror of what it was before

Maybe this fate was written for us,
two perfect players whose webs intertwine like constellations;
This illuminance casts shadows over ever lonely corner.

Maybe we are to be blinded to all
but the universe reflected in the other's gaze.

Surely you were cast upon me
with wicked spells of infatuation
to grace me with heartstrings trailing behind me,
and if I fall they catch me. cradle me, create home for me.

This life has been blessed with your delicate soul,
your fire-glazed passions,
your winged mind that reaches the brim of humanity and returns unscathed.

Your radiating love compels me,
I finally return to that tattered home
with a guiding soul beside me. < I don't really like this resolution, it seems a little unoriginal and to eager to resolve the poems issues.>

Overall, this poem is just a little too banal for my tastes. The idea seems like something explored before. However, the poem is very readable and I can appreciate that tremendously.