mother

[Erthona]

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"germs ovlivious to our ground." do you mean oblivious?


"we ache cause we do

share your wounds."

"We ache because we share your wounds"      1 line of iambic tetrameter, which was the meter in stanzas 2 & 3.
and I will see you in cartoons.                            You need one more line here to be inline with the rest of the poem.

Your rhyme pattern in the rest of the poem is xxaa, xxbb, your last stanza should follow the same pattern, along with four lines of iambic tetrameter. You currently don't do this in S3. At best you have 4 half lines in S3, if you can even call them that.

You also have possible meter problems in S1L2.

we measured every element               solid meter

down to your iron core we scanned   
"Iron" is problematic, although it is listed as two syllables, it is generally pronounced more as a diphthong, than as two syllable like Eye-ron
but who you are is long forgotten  Both of these last 2 lines are a half foot long, but that is OK as you have a turn between L3&L4.
secret gardens reaped and rotten.
 

 
 
Dale