Humpback Anthem-Edit 1

[tectak]

My heart thunders to the rhythm of the pod's chant,
echoing across the abyss, You may want to consider this. Technically, echoes need something which an abyss is short on....namely something to echo off
calling us to the birthing place.
Calling us home.

Fat and strong and ripe with life,
I left the icy krill waters,
crossed the terrible dark deep
and found again the warm blue reefs.

I sound into the depths,
turn and hurl upward through the sea,
soaring into the light, my blood ablaze,
flightless wings askew. Not a perfect image, but it DOES impact upon the cerebral retina. I think it is just that word "askew" that seems well, wrong. Too many little inaccuracies add up. "blood ablaze" does  not help when so close.

I roll and blow and flail my flukes,
quivering with delight,
from the caress of sun upon my skin
And the nuzzle of new life. Be carefull....you almost rhymed. What a shrink would say is that this is a suppressed desire to so do....what I would say is that this last line is forced....for the sake of a non-essential non rhyme.

For now we sing the winter sun. to the winter sun. Your meter is not running so why not?
Soon enough, the hunger will wake. comma superfluous where it is so move it to line end. Better?
Calling us back to the feeding place.
Calling us home.

Hi onepapa,
I am loathe to say anything negative about this piece..not because it is perfect but because it is perfectly acceptable as it is.
Any comments, then, are offerings. First, see in text.

The main issue is that of tense. You are back and forward like a pendulum. Needs looking at.
Next is over-modification. You have dispensed with meter. Fine. You do not rhyme. Fine. But casting off these two straight-jackets is no reason to re-shackle yourself with poetic desire. If  nouns are twice dressed the reader sees the bodice but not the body beneath.
One thing, notwithstanding the afforementioned...I noted that you have not got in to the habit of capitalising every line... please, please do not. I see a slip on an "And". It serves no purpose except to expose the writer as faux-poetic...worse, even when not. The irritating tendency died of natural causes five decades or more ago. It was never a good idea.
The move to Serious was moot. A very worthy effort.
Well done all,
Best,
tectak