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01-31-2015, 04:55 AM

(01-31-2015, 04:12 AM)Leah S. Wrote: It's tightening up nicely. I wasn't sure about adding 'army fatigues' but it alliterates nicely with 'peas' in an internal rhyme sort of way. I'd still lose the capital on "Lima's." There are no Peruvian cities on the plate. I'm sort of sad to lose 'scary' but 'creepy' is okay too. Carry on. Best, Leah

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Canned Father (edit2) - by ChristopherSea - 01-30-2015, 12:44 AM

RE: Canned Father - by Leah S. - 01-30-2015, 03:39 AM

RE: Canned Father - by ChristopherSea - 01-30-2015, 04:41 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by Leah S. - 01-30-2015, 05:54 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by ChristopherSea - 01-30-2015, 06:01 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by Leah S. - 01-30-2015, 06:03 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by ChristopherSea - 01-30-2015, 08:37 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by Brownlie - 01-30-2015, 11:54 PM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by ChristopherSea - 01-31-2015, 12:56 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit2) - by Brownlie - 01-31-2015, 01:18 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by Tiger the Lion - 01-31-2015, 12:59 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by ChristopherSea - 01-31-2015, 01:04 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit1) - by Tiger the Lion - 01-31-2015, 01:09 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit2) - by ChristopherSea - 01-31-2015, 01:16 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit2) - by Leah S. - 01-31-2015, 04:12 AM

RE: Canned Father (edit2) - by ChristopherSea - 01-31-2015, 04:55 AM

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