A Day Less Than A Century
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Brenkin, First and foremost, do not capitalize every line if you are not going to punctuate. You will end up with one long run-on sentence. Here's some quick punctuation suggestions:

(01-31-2015, 01:31 AM)Brenkin Wrote:  A Day Less Than a Century  

It feels like a day less than a century
when I last called your name<.>
I blew the dust off my memories
to see they hadn't changed<.>  

I could close my eyes this very minute
and visualize your visage<.>  
Although it’s been a lifetime<,>
the image looks so vivid

and in the back of my mind<.>
Your touch<,> it still remains
along with the sound of your voice<.>
The thoughts will not decay<.>

Your absence seems endless<.>
All I have left are memories of senses<.>  

It’s senseless<.>
Start with something like this and edit accordingly. You could forego all punctuation and use line breaks or white space to achieve caesura as well. Good luck./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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A Day Less Than A Century - by Brenkin - 01-31-2015, 01:31 AM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by Brownlie - 01-31-2015, 02:06 AM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by Brenkin - 01-31-2015, 02:18 AM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by ChristopherSea - 01-31-2015, 03:15 AM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by Erthona - 01-31-2015, 04:12 AM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by Brenkin - 01-31-2015, 12:23 PM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by ellajam - 01-31-2015, 06:57 PM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by Erthona - 02-01-2015, 10:13 AM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by Rustymetal - 02-03-2015, 09:46 PM
RE: A Day Less Than A Century - by ellajam - 02-03-2015, 10:20 PM



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