Canned Father (edit2)

[ChristopherSea]

You are welcome....I like it very much! I still think that you established the color of his skin with great skill, without the reference to late summer. You've got the beans, burnt sienna, and the bronze statue: all vivid clear images. I still think the 'late summer' image isn't up to the standard you've already set. I think your idea about using 'by' works very well. You might think about 'colored by' since it still scans. I love the alliteration of 'botanical behemoths', but it took my mind off on a tangent, imagining what sort of beast might have boils that were really lima beans. I came back from that excursion safely, but you have to admit, it's a bit off the subject of your poem. I'm not adamantly against you using it, maybe it's just my overly vivid imagination.

OK Leah, I am always up for continuous editing, even if I mark a poem as final version! I will review those points and lines again. Cheers/Chris  

Hey Chris, recheck my reply, I edited it a bunch, and you might have read it before I fixed my goofs. Best, Leah

Oh yes, thanks again for sticking with me on this one! I like 'colored by summer' and I will attempt to prune back that botanical behemoth.