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[Rustymetal]

I actually enjoyed this though I too was rappin the words in my head. I did not know that rap was not poetry until just now. I thought it was poetry with beats and scratching. Tom you made me laugh with your comment, come on no place in poetry for randy? Well that's no fun at all. Hhhaha. Somnium you sound young but I don't think that's are bad thing. It would be false to write in a way that is not you. I think after "pose" though "need some manners I spose" or something may fit better and maybe "creation is everything". You know what mate, it was fun, youthful and it made me smile.