Dirt

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey WJ, I thought I had commented on this one earlier. A couple thoughts on this enjoyable read. I 100% agree that "on summer weekends" needs changing. You have already shown us that it's summer with "camp, sun, lake, blueberries" so you needn't tell after showing us nicely. I'm not even sure if you need to qualify "weekends" as the whole piece has a feel of summer camp. I think the moon is fine where it is. Especially chronologically in the poem. A personal preference might be that the moon would "watch" rather than "shine".
Thanks for this one.
Paul