01-28-2015, 09:38 AM
Thanks a tonne for your thoughts everyone.
It is a little weird going from the Iambic in the first two lines to the lack of meter in the rest of the poem, but I'm not sure what I can do about that.
I think I can definitely tidy it up a bit though, and I can probably think of a better image than the already implied moon at the end as well.
It is a little weird going from the Iambic in the first two lines to the lack of meter in the rest of the poem, but I'm not sure what I can do about that.
I think I can definitely tidy it up a bit though, and I can probably think of a better image than the already implied moon at the end as well.