01-22-2015, 06:07 AM
There's a lot to like here (given the entendre of Isis superhero vs Isis the jihadists)
Also, really love the innuendo going on.
It does get really muddled in your meter though, and if you wish to cling to the Isis superhero stuff you need really strong rhyming couplets that follow her usual iambic tetrameter.
Also, if you use She captialized, you should also use Her. Just saying, either she is a god, or isn't.
Welcome aboard.
mel.
Also, really love the innuendo going on.
It does get really muddled in your meter though, and if you wish to cling to the Isis superhero stuff you need really strong rhyming couplets that follow her usual iambic tetrameter.
Also, if you use She captialized, you should also use Her. Just saying, either she is a god, or isn't.
Welcome aboard.
mel.