I wonder how it feels to be a bird

[just mercedes]

I wonder how it feels to be a bird
Surging with song,
I throw my mind into their winged bodies
To no semblance, and ere long

I'm reminded of the border of death
Which too, my knowing cannot transcend.
I, bound only to my self
And severed from all else,
Cannot even myself comprehend

Hi - I really wish you'd remove those annoying caps at the start of each line. They really change the way a poem is read, by chopping it into stilted semi-coherence.

Your first line pulls your reader in - the constant iambs. But they vanish, never to reappear as a full line.
2nd line - I like the bird/surge near rhyme
3rd line - The image of throwing your mind doesn't work for me. Why 'winged bodies'? They're birds, aren't they?
4th line - to no semblance of what? 'ere' why the sudden archaism?

5th line - no problems
6th line - 'too'? As well as what?
7th line - unsure what the 'bound' is
8th line - does this repeat the information of the line before?
9th line - unclear - I myself cannot understand, or I cannot understand myself?

I really like your enthusiasm for writing. This exuberance needs to be tempered a little though, in your actual words.

Thanks for posting this, and keep your pen wet!