01-06-2015, 01:14 PM
(01-05-2015, 08:54 AM)cjchaffin Wrote: morning, January 1Hey CJ. I like this one. I do think there is some ambiguity in the punctuation. If I am reading it correctly, I think the comma after "favors" needs to be a semicolon.
The streets are quiet, finally.
Hopes and dreams litter the sidewalk
alongside beer bottles and party favors,
neglected clichés clinging to one another
as I sweep them all away.
If not, and "beer bottles, party favors and neglected cliches" are all one list, then I think you need a comma after "bottles" moving the "and" to before "neglected". Hope that math adds up.
Thanks for sharing,
Paul
