What have we done..

[shootthestar25]

My attempt at what would be considered slam poetry I guess.. Which really only reads correctly in the mind of the writer lol good luck..


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Political unrest, and riots in our streets.

Circular wars, and scorched earth in the Middle East.

Mothers lying their babies to rest, while fathers are resting in another woman's sheets. <-- I love this line!

All the while, another child looses their life on the streets.

The media calls them "casualties of war".. To me more like casualties of greed. <-- I'd leave out "To me", since it is slam poetry, we'll get that it is the speaker's opinion without you needing to say it

Countless lives being lost over things we don't need.

See, what we NEED is an enlightened generation willing to plant a seed. 

A seed that will grow in the mind of our youth, And come to fruition in the form of a society that knows only great love and truth. <-- This line feels clumsy when I read it aloud. Not sure how to fix it...

Because what we have now, well, it doesn't work.. 

We are a pasteurized and preservative filled prepackaged generation. <--This line sounds awesome out loud

Graciously provided by media sponsors and major corporations.. <-- I feel like this is a strong end