Vow of Silence;

[tectak]

This really speaks to me. You create a feeling of stasis through your poem, although time is clearly moving it seems the life of the narrator is not. It urges me to read on because I want to discover more and learn if the narrator resolves his feelings. Great work!

I think you misunderstand critique. Though you have commented on the poem you have used me,me, and I in two sentences. The comment you make will not help the writer...but you may feel better. Try to point out areas of excellence by all means, but say why. Try to point out areas of weakness....but say why.
You would expect the same ...surely.
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