It may be raining, but we don't have to go outside

[B888IE]

Please keep in mind I am using this as a spoken word piece, but it may also appear as a paper copy.
--first critique-able draft.
It may be raining, but we don’t have to go outside

Let me be the remedy for the season,
it may be raining, but we don't have to go outside.
Take the flow and slow dance in our arms,
and just take a bath in it. This doesn't sound right, i'm not sure how to correct it though... 'Let's take a bath in it?
You can be the scented candle,
we can be the flame. This and the last line don't sound right to me, because you've already said what she is.
Don't worry about the rain, we don’t have to go outside. Nothing in the poem is refering to going outside, so it doesn't sound right to me.

We can bundle up, and sing our song.
We can dance forever, the night is long I like this.
and we can pretend it’s a saturday, because there's nothing I’d rather do
than spend the day with you.

You're more than work, and more than play,
so lets relax and take a day.
I’ll bring you chocolate, we melt worries away. Grammar is wrong here
Everything is so expensive, we don’t have to go outside. Same problem here as in first stanza

Make our walls bloom with colors,
make our colors vibrant,
vibrant like our romance,
romance like a supernova. hmm the word supernova just doesn't fit the theme of this poem for me

Lets let the rain start a beat.
Heat it up, pick a cup, lets erupt. Heat what up, why a cup?
I want to hear you singsong all day, grammar not correct
we can pingpong back and forth,
you’re my rebirth. this line stops the flow

So sing us a song, take my hand...dance along;
angels are our spot light.
Let this day be long. This is ok.
We don’t have to go outside.

Well done!