Mistletoe
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(12-24-2014, 07:46 AM)Tale of Memories Wrote:  
(12-21-2014, 02:25 AM)Brownlie Wrote:   

We’ve all forgotten that a mild toxin
placed above the hearth is ordered to bid lips,
But embalmed potpourri’s that circles in infinity
Is not cessation manifested in a merry corpse.
The end, which is a singular of many, is in the couples.
Destined for the mistletoe,
their odds increase with years together.
This is very interesting. "Above the hearth" makes me think of a forgotten urn, and you're implying that what matters is love and living before the end.

I like how I can't get a firm grasp of your poems intent because it makes me read it again and again and draw my own conclusions.

Do you mean to have an apostrophe after "potpourri"?
Apostrophe = typo. Don't get me started on those Urns and their paradoxical moments of ephemeral passion cast in marble.
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Mistletoe - by Brownlie - 12-21-2014, 02:25 AM
RE: Mistletoe - by amiwrite - 12-28-2014, 11:33 AM
RE: Mistletoe - by tectak - 12-29-2014, 03:07 AM
RE: Mistletoe - by Erthona - 12-29-2014, 03:37 AM
RE: Mistletoe - by Brownlie - 12-29-2014, 05:15 AM
RE: Mistletoe - by Erthona - 12-29-2014, 11:17 AM



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