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I Hate Her:
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12-24-2014, 03:14 AM
This is great. I think you should keep the wording as is. Some suggested "put the bitch down," or "I'll miss that dog" or something, but I think that those additions would only dull the poem or weigh it down. It has great zing. My one suggestion would be to maybe remove the hyphen? For me, at least, it was more of a distraction in an otherwise unpunctuated poem.
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I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-11-2012, 06:04 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-12-2012, 06:02 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Philatone - 05-12-2012, 07:12 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by abu nuwas - 05-14-2012, 06:48 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-14-2012, 11:07 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Erthona - 05-14-2012, 07:31 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-15-2012, 05:51 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by stb1931 - 10-31-2014, 07:49 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by SimikPK - 10-31-2014, 10:45 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Tiger the Lion - 11-01-2014, 01:08 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 11-01-2014, 07:09 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by SimikPK - 11-01-2014, 08:24 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by vagabond - 11-18-2014, 09:46 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by paranoid marvin - 11-19-2014, 08:08 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 11-19-2014, 06:27 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by azure - 11-19-2014, 06:31 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by bgre9184 - 12-11-2014, 12:22 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by amiwrite - 12-28-2014, 12:19 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Voker101 - 12-14-2014, 11:35 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by alatos - 12-24-2014, 03:14 AM
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