12-10-2014, 06:50 PM
this sounds silly but i like the poem even though i'm not sure what it's about. at present it feels just a little too ambiguous. my take is that it's about a relationship that's died, it's the they i'm not getting. and i'm presuming there's an extended metaphor at play. in non-lateral way it has connotations of sex but that could just be my sick mind.
at the sound of the desperate call of the early morning;
that ghost-bitten yawn of life before the life of those
i think the above lines could be tightened up with a little work and still say the same thing.
wish i could have seen more into the poem.
at the sound of the desperate call of the early morning;
that ghost-bitten yawn of life before the life of those
i think the above lines could be tightened up with a little work and still say the same thing.
wish i could have seen more into the poem.
(12-09-2014, 11:02 AM)Eluoh Wrote: I don't know--
Perhaps they could have done a little more,
felt a little more, shivered a little more
at the sound of the desperate call of the early morning;
that ghost-bitten yawn of life before the life of those
who refused to wake.
They cripple and harvest the roots
in search of something with appeal;
orphaning the dry field,
and you,
the dry field, bear no good soil for
those farmers and hounds of Thoreau
who lounge in their tacky suits with
god-like mouths.
You found the grave of yourself under the overgrown
moon and howling fog, and beneath the beating of no heart cried
"Alive,
alive,
alive!"
in spite of the thickening thorns in your side,
in spite of the masses defecating in your good eyes,
in spite of the life you acquired at death's bedside.
