It may be raining, but we don't have to go outside

[QDeathstar]

Thank you Qdeathstar! My audience is mainly, my girlfriend, but also read on open mic. I was so caught up in my hopeless romance lines, I did not catch a lot of these lines that do not make sense. I do need to clarify my use of "we". Also, the colors will be taken out; Ive been told before that it doesn't suit the poem. What did you find intriguing about the last few lines? maybe I can build off of it.

I think the we, us, and you wording in the poem is holding it down the most..

I liked the last few lines the because you can feel the dance and the romance in those lines, instead of being told about it like we are in the fist 3/4 of the poem