It may be raining, but we don't have to go outside

[QDeathstar]

I appreciate the attempt to write a non traditional love poem, that's what I understand it to be, but there are a couple glaring disappointments that need to be reworked. The last few lines of the poem are intriguing but I can't figure out if they are something more than mere gobbled gook due to the wordiness that had went on before.

I wasn't able to finish my comments earlier, so I just posted this wrap up now. Thanks