Blind Desire:

[Beacherjosh]

I found this poem at first glance very visually appealing, but its formatting does not seem to parallel any meaning or imagery in your poem. Others have mentioned the the grammatical issues, and the clichés, But I did notice vocab repetition in your #2 and #18 line with heart. You also have vocab repetition in your #4 and #20 line. This repetition is in your rhyme scheme and it felt over used to me. I too, really like the theme of your poem! =)