11-30-2014, 11:12 AM
Perhaps, with reborn, you didn't mean to convey a literal rebirth, in the traditional sense, but rather, re-purposed, like a the man whose life is forever changed by war,as if to imply the perpetual reenacting of the same war. You too shall succumb, as all those to follow.
"death dealt by demons,
holy men and all,
whose merciless gods walk by their side. --------> I feel like this deals with the Gods we (re)construct in our image to justify war.
Faced to the wall" ------- And that this supports the above point I made. We speak on behalf of a silent God, rendering Its (Gods) intentions interchangeable as we see fit. Like the ultimate excuse.
And I particularly enjoyed the flow of the poem, and the image "Wind torn and tied" was very effective, and well placed.
"death dealt by demons,
holy men and all,
whose merciless gods walk by their side. --------> I feel like this deals with the Gods we (re)construct in our image to justify war.
Faced to the wall" ------- And that this supports the above point I made. We speak on behalf of a silent God, rendering Its (Gods) intentions interchangeable as we see fit. Like the ultimate excuse.
And I particularly enjoyed the flow of the poem, and the image "Wind torn and tied" was very effective, and well placed.