11-28-2014, 10:03 AM
I quite liked this - but I found it a "thick" read which demands concentration from the reader.
I think it would benefit from a few shorter (maybe even one word) lines to break it up.
Seems almost too structured for the subject matter.
Isn't that kind of the way the internet works - in bursts of data?
Just a thought
Nice work!
Paul
I think it would benefit from a few shorter (maybe even one word) lines to break it up.
Seems almost too structured for the subject matter.
Isn't that kind of the way the internet works - in bursts of data?
Just a thought
Nice work!
Paul

