virtual
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I quite liked this - but I found it a "thick" read which demands concentration from the reader.
I think it would benefit from a few shorter (maybe even one word) lines to break it up.
Seems almost too structured for the subject matter.
Isn't that kind of the way the internet works - in bursts of data?
Just a thought
Nice work!
Paul
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virtual - by vagabond - 11-24-2014, 03:18 AM
RE: virtual - by milo - 11-24-2014, 03:31 AM
RE: virtual - by vagabond - 11-24-2014, 03:37 AM
RE: virtual - by Brownlie - 11-24-2014, 04:39 AM
RE: virtual - by milo - 11-24-2014, 04:43 AM
RE: virtual - by just mercedes - 11-24-2014, 04:50 AM
RE: virtual - by 71degrees - 11-24-2014, 08:31 AM
RE: virtual - by Mwaba don - 11-24-2014, 11:50 AM
RE: virtual - by Liz11 - 11-25-2014, 01:27 PM
RE: virtual - by vagabond - 11-25-2014, 11:46 PM
RE: virtual - by azure - 11-27-2014, 09:36 PM
RE: virtual - by Mark D. Windmill - 11-28-2014, 04:44 AM
RE: virtual - by paulcanuck - 11-28-2014, 10:03 AM
RE: virtual - by Lizzie - 10-21-2017, 04:17 PM
RE: virtual - by vagabond - 10-21-2017, 05:40 PM



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