11-28-2014, 05:33 AM
hello
do i smell a pink floyd reference?
anyhow, why the capital letters? it seems fashionable now days.
I think 'where we start/ or WHERE we end' is better.
I appreciate the gaps between lines, representing ripples etc. and it is effective.
the actual poem is a bit limp. It feels like it's all trough and no crest, if you see what I mean. more empty space than something you can get your teeth in.
regardless, thanks for sharing.
do i smell a pink floyd reference?
anyhow, why the capital letters? it seems fashionable now days.
I think 'where we start/ or WHERE we end' is better.
I appreciate the gaps between lines, representing ripples etc. and it is effective.
the actual poem is a bit limp. It feels like it's all trough and no crest, if you see what I mean. more empty space than something you can get your teeth in.
regardless, thanks for sharing.