The Stutterer (Mwaba Don)

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Obstacle crop up forces emotion
slow down, like a motorist spots this dosen't make sense, and seems to have grammatical issues.
potholes and cautiously adjusts, didn't like the enjambment.
in conditions of social discomfort.

Silent pauses occur involuntarily, Language seems forced and robotic
like compressing and loosening more robtic word choice
a gas hose concurrently, Concurrently doesn't seem to fit here.
sounds are annoyingly prolonged. lots of 'ing(s)' here, too many, they stifle the expression.

But with dynamic desire to orate, nice d(s)
as though realizing a positive idea
trickling memories of mumbling flow,
dialog goes on remorseful  hold. Your enjambments seem forced and they aren't effective.

A part of a stutterers nature, This line seems really devoid of poetic expressiveness, I suggest, "showing not telling", annoying advice, I assure you.
as if ones forced on a life path Drop 'ones'.
that coaches in a torturous way I like this line, good imagery.
the harmony of body and discourse.

This poem obviously had a well of inspiration behind it, yet I think the intellect choked the life force out of your expression. The word choice seems robotic and devoid of color and emotionally charged imagery. I suggest adhering to the phrase: "show, don't tell". You must strive for refining your poems, drawing upon the internal, yet fully utilizing technique and discipline. You obviously have a lot of powerful emotional sources to utilize, and that is excellent. Let that pain and fury fuel your art. Keep at it.

Azure