11-24-2014, 02:36 PM
ok so you've had so many comments so far and I'm not going to rehash the obvious. First things first, I love this--you know I love the whole cyclic nature of everything on this planet and there is alot of word play going on. Needs a better title, I think you know that. You also know my state of mind the last few days, so a great title to me would be Fresh Rot or something.
I'm going to do a "rewrite" if you will---god I hate those...but just to show how I would do it.
musty old building
gray-haired woman mops
bleach pools on floor
meh. said I wouldn't do it tonight, but I done did.
lover ya
melicious
I'm going to do a "rewrite" if you will---god I hate those...but just to show how I would do it.
musty old building
gray-haired woman mops
bleach pools on floor
meh. said I wouldn't do it tonight, but I done did.
lover ya
melicious
