11-21-2014, 08:38 AM
The word "shutters" is an excellent choice in this context, it is deep and vibrant, plus it gives the impression of someone whose eyes are not completely closed. I would work towards less ambiguity. Whether cidermaids interpretation is correct or not I do not know, and cannot tell from the poem. It certainly is one interpretation, but there are a number of others that could fit easily as well. Poetry should not be written like a Buddhist Koan. There is a reason why people don't drive tractors on the highway.
Dale
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.