Humilty

[azure]

Afflicting that one finds oneself to exist
after great loss or great accomplishment
at the same state of actuality
as if all originates from the same state of being, Humility!

Enlightening, that in search for wholeness
a lowly heart lies not at an aisle’s close
but like clothing one don’s when in esteemed need
especially in the midst of those higher than oneself.

Puzzling that, such a gift of being,
poses as a veil for all who
present themselves in goodness
purposely only to make them vulnerable.

It may be an act for the rich,
it may be a solace for the poor,
it may be a jewel for the noble
but in all graces a holder of esteems.

Dispiriting to those who know not
like an unknown Jewel it may lay forgotten
yet it lies open in actuality, worse even
it May be used as a mask to deceive the destitute.

But then,
a lowly heart will be a lonely heart
if it joys not.
Likewise,
a lowly heart will be a depressed heart  
if prided not.

That one would suppress one self’s joy
in fear that he or she be judged phony
that one would lose one’s self sincerity
in fear that he or she be judged gloomy.

Certainly, a lowly heart through it all
a source of ones joy.
all in all a lowly heart through it all
a bearer of all life’s Troubles.

Your language use here is clumsy and sluggish, weighing down this piece and making it difficult to read and digest. Your use of repetition with certain words shows lack of experience and review, like you just sped through the creative process and rushed the production of the poem. I also have issues with the poems length and blatant cliches. Also there are some grammatical errors that need to be attended to. This poem needs serious editing before it's expression is concise and executed properly. Review your poetry before posting it, and edit as much as you can beforehand. All the best.

Azure