11-19-2014, 03:37 AM
Hi Tom,
Thanks for the comments and thoughts.
"Like" was unexpected, I had your critical perusal in mind when I made the predictable comment... I thought you would be likely to tear it apart as dull...so I hid it in misc
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Glad i managed to fill the list of sea sounds - would hate to disappoint.
You are of course quite correct over the use of flotsam / jetsam...( I had just got them the wrong way around) although even jetsam still does not really fit my line of thoughts...more a piece of driftwood upon a beach. I wanted to convey an idea of being loved and beauty being percieved in something that is just passed over as rubbish normaly. (It's a God love thing!). My other option /suggestion for a title was along the lines of:- The art of driftwood
I can see and do conceed many of the points you make concerning how this one might confuse in terms of the third person...what can I say religion is complicated when you have a triune based relationship you are trying to shoehorn into a methaphor
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Finally it is almost a relief that you mentioned the forced rhyme and the contrivience on the floodplanes lines. I had a fixed image of how the incomming tidal forces will drag something under the sand and bury it...the layers in a beach...but I'm struggling to make it work for me. Anyway thanks for the red light on this, will go back and reconsider.
All comments much appreciated.
Cheers AJ.
Thanks for the comments and thoughts.
"Like" was unexpected, I had your critical perusal in mind when I made the predictable comment... I thought you would be likely to tear it apart as dull...so I hid it in misc
.Glad i managed to fill the list of sea sounds - would hate to disappoint.
You are of course quite correct over the use of flotsam / jetsam...( I had just got them the wrong way around) although even jetsam still does not really fit my line of thoughts...more a piece of driftwood upon a beach. I wanted to convey an idea of being loved and beauty being percieved in something that is just passed over as rubbish normaly. (It's a God love thing!). My other option /suggestion for a title was along the lines of:- The art of driftwood
I can see and do conceed many of the points you make concerning how this one might confuse in terms of the third person...what can I say religion is complicated when you have a triune based relationship you are trying to shoehorn into a methaphor
.Finally it is almost a relief that you mentioned the forced rhyme and the contrivience on the floodplanes lines. I had a fixed image of how the incomming tidal forces will drag something under the sand and bury it...the layers in a beach...but I'm struggling to make it work for me. Anyway thanks for the red light on this, will go back and reconsider.
All comments much appreciated.
Cheers AJ.