Getting The Drop
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Thanks for the feedback guys. I wasn't sure about the last line with the 'but' as it messed up my 10 beats per line rhthym, but I thought it was necessary to convey the meaning - obviously that isn't the case. I'm not convinced about using a colon after loophole though.
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Getting The Drop - by paranoid marvin - 11-15-2014, 07:19 AM
RE: Getting The Drop - by Leanne - 11-15-2014, 07:28 AM
RE: Getting The Drop - by azure - 11-15-2014, 02:19 PM
RE: Getting The Drop - by billy - 11-15-2014, 05:56 PM
RE: Getting The Drop - by paranoid marvin - 11-15-2014, 11:54 PM



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