11-15-2014, 10:01 AM
I feel that this topic is kind of overused, but I did enjoy your use of language to give it a solid expression. Then again most of themes that I draw upon are like that too... I think the last stanza could have been executed in a more jarring manner. I will be coming back to this a few more times and try to be of more use to its development and refinement.
cliche my forte

