Getting The Drop
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This is a pleasant (though not for Robin) poem that would be greatly enhanced with a bit of attention to the meter.  For example:

(11-15-2014, 07:19 AM)paranoid marvin Wrote:  The Sheriff at last had succeeded
In catching the Man in the Hood
The trial was a foregone conclusion -- remove 'was'
Now Nottingham wanted his blood -- I'd suggest substituting 'when' for 'now', since Nottingham always wanted his blood

But Robin was no common villain
A fellow who never lost hope
The outlaw once more found a loophole -- a colon here
But this time at the end of a rope -- remove 'but'
It could be worse
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Getting The Drop - by paranoid marvin - 11-15-2014, 07:19 AM
RE: Getting The Drop - by Leanne - 11-15-2014, 07:28 AM
RE: Getting The Drop - by azure - 11-15-2014, 02:19 PM
RE: Getting The Drop - by billy - 11-15-2014, 05:56 PM
RE: Getting The Drop - by paranoid marvin - 11-15-2014, 11:54 PM



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