Who's at the door?

Who's at the door?

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11-11-2014, 05:27 PM

A pleasant read for sure. I found myself smiling learning about this 'family'. Only 'critique'...the "where ever he is he can’t have got far" line did not seem to flow smoothly like the rest of the poem did. It just reads oddly to me. Keep on keepin' on with your writing!

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Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-07-2014, 08:20 AM

RE: Who's at the door? - by Erthona - 11-07-2014, 08:47 AM

RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-08-2014, 08:31 AM

RE: Who's at the door? - by SimikPK - 11-08-2014, 07:19 PM

RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:13 AM

RE: Who's at the door? - by billy - 11-08-2014, 08:25 PM

RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:18 AM

RE: Who's at the door? - by cidermaid - 11-08-2014, 10:57 PM

RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:22 AM

RE: Who's at the door? - by Bunx - 11-09-2014, 02:42 AM