Light

[billy]

usually in short poems, brevity wins the day. make it as succinct as you can without losing the essence of it. also watch out for cliches which can be used but shouldn't be. specially in short poems like this. (cliches when done properly can add something, generally they detract)
the caps lead me astray, mainly because there's no punctuation. in effect is cocks up the pause at the end of each line.

And when I saw your face no need for [and] to open with a cliche already has readers not wanting to carry on
It was like all my mind’s clouds no need for [it was like all]
Were cast away
By your soul’s sunshine
Like the dust had settled no need for [the]
And in your being
I had found a new light i think the last two lines work well enough in expressing love, i do like that you didn't use the word love or beauty)