11-10-2014, 11:40 AM
I really enjoyed this poem.
I'm wondering if there's a way to incoporate the recurring line (and she thinks about going with him) into the last stanza (eg. darkness runs away/she thought about going with him)
I agree with the other comments about "frigid adrenaline", it sounds really cool but I don't think it makes much sense and not in this poem (maybe save it for another idea because it does have a great sound to it).
I really love the structure of the stanzas and I found the poem very intruiging.
I'm wondering if there's a way to incoporate the recurring line (and she thinks about going with him) into the last stanza (eg. darkness runs away/she thought about going with him)
I agree with the other comments about "frigid adrenaline", it sounds really cool but I don't think it makes much sense and not in this poem (maybe save it for another idea because it does have a great sound to it).
I really love the structure of the stanzas and I found the poem very intruiging.