11-02-2014, 12:07 AM
Thank you guys.
Leanne - "too good to be true" yes, we can't expect to be nourished by empty calories - and ought to know better as grown ups.
Tectak - you give me too much credit if you think I could fully justify that dash. Haha. The fourth line was meant to conclude L2 and L3, but I also felt it could somewhat stand alone. Looking at it this morning, a simple comma rather than the dash might not disturb my intent. In all honesty, as far as punctuation goes, I'm still a student and often go with how something best reads out loud until the experts here direct me otherwise.
Billy - you really got me stuck on "could/would" now. I almost edited to "would" because I think you are correct as far as meaning goes. Somehow "could" preserves the tone I was hoping for. I'm looking at "you'd" as a compromise that might cover both angles.
Very encouraging to wake up to these comments. Especially from you three in particular. Thank you - Paul
Leanne - "too good to be true" yes, we can't expect to be nourished by empty calories - and ought to know better as grown ups.
Tectak - you give me too much credit if you think I could fully justify that dash. Haha. The fourth line was meant to conclude L2 and L3, but I also felt it could somewhat stand alone. Looking at it this morning, a simple comma rather than the dash might not disturb my intent. In all honesty, as far as punctuation goes, I'm still a student and often go with how something best reads out loud until the experts here direct me otherwise.
Billy - you really got me stuck on "could/would" now. I almost edited to "would" because I think you are correct as far as meaning goes. Somehow "could" preserves the tone I was hoping for. I'm looking at "you'd" as a compromise that might cover both angles.
Very encouraging to wake up to these comments. Especially from you three in particular. Thank you - Paul