Robin Redbreast

[Magpie]

I agree with JM, this bird needs to go back to school, "to the death I will fight" is indeed awkward.

"I have fire on my belly" A clever usage of what would be a cliche. It gives a great visual.

dale

I see now that the beginning of the second stanza does read awkwardly. I will definitely take a look at it and post a revised version. 

As regards the 'nearly cliche', it actually started out as the obvious "I have fire in my belly", until my cliche alarm kicked in and I changed it to 'on'. So I guess in some ways it was dumb luck, because if I had of been wise enough in the first place to not write a cliche I would have never come up with what looks like quite a clever use of it.

Thanks for reading,

Mark