I Hate Her:
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billy Wrote:1st edit:
My dog bit the wife
She might have caught rabies-
I put them both down.
The strongest point of this poem is its lenght. That´s what I love about short poems - there is little (but often still much Smile ) which can go wrong. The ambiguous "she" in line 2 does all the good work. Using "the wife" instead of "my wife" to me works as a suggestion of the not-so-good relationship with "the wife" and being where it is - end of a line 1, the line being line 1, makes an excellent introduction and interpretation key to the whole poem. Smile What about naming a specific breed of the dog? It might convey something more, but also could divert the attention from the main (and single) point of the poem. Don´t know, just an idea.

stb1931 Wrote:Fantastic!... not the putting down the dog, the poem
Do you think it reffered to the dog who was put down? It is edited now, but still.. consider. Smile
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Messages In This Thread
I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-11-2012, 06:04 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-12-2012, 06:02 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Philatone - 05-12-2012, 07:12 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by abu nuwas - 05-14-2012, 06:48 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-14-2012, 11:07 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Erthona - 05-14-2012, 07:31 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 05-15-2012, 05:51 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by stb1931 - 10-31-2014, 07:49 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by SimikPK - 10-31-2014, 10:45 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Tiger the Lion - 11-01-2014, 01:08 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 11-01-2014, 07:09 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by SimikPK - 11-01-2014, 08:24 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by vagabond - 11-18-2014, 09:46 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by paranoid marvin - 11-19-2014, 08:08 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by billy - 11-19-2014, 06:27 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by azure - 11-19-2014, 06:31 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by bgre9184 - 12-11-2014, 12:22 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by amiwrite - 12-28-2014, 12:19 PM
RE: I Hate Her: - by Voker101 - 12-14-2014, 11:35 AM
RE: I Hate Her: - by alatos - 12-24-2014, 03:14 AM



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