10-30-2014, 04:39 AM
Hey, ray, I really enjoyed this. I like the way you got the reality of oppression into such a lighthearted romp of a poem.
It held my interest so well but then I had to google Dawn French, and though she may not be young IMO you could do worse.
While those who know of her may think she's the perfect fit here, I'd love to see you come up with something more universally loathsome for a last line.
Thanks for posting it, good one.
It held my interest so well but then I had to google Dawn French, and though she may not be young IMO you could do worse.
While those who know of her may think she's the perfect fit here, I'd love to see you come up with something more universally loathsome for a last line.Thanks for posting it, good one.
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