10-27-2014, 06:19 AM
--thank you for your opinion. as much as you dislike abstractions, is how much i love them.
--This poem is about the fallacy that the world is teaching children is the right way(in this poem, i am going in opposition with this fallacy). such as racism, hatred, a fear of an authority, a fear of life in general.
the first stanza is basically "a bond of forsaken brotherhood" meaning the bond we have as humans is being forsaken, because of wars amongst other humans, as the "forsakeness"(abstraction) is riding along a shallow swampy river of blood "red slough" portraying blood spilled due to the forsaken bond...
--the second stanza begins by saying that the "uprooting of stability threatens to grab helm"...by this, i am offering light from the dark thoughts of this fallacy continuing endlessly by saying that to uproot the stablity(stability here meaning the state of fallacy that humans have been living in forever) threatens to take control of the "boat" going up the red slough. i am saying that the act of not living in the fallacy "threatens" to come into existence and change the fate of endless wars and bloodshed.
in the later lines, the words are portraying an image of battles humans have such as against nature, another human, and ourselves. it is a timeless battle because these battles have been obviously going since the beginning of time. the battle is pitted against mountain and sea because the fact that these battles have been going on for centuries and no victor has been declared...
how can one wield dreams of immortality? well speaking metaphorically, one can wield anything that he thinks will keep him alive during a battle, the only reason people wage wars is to be the greatest and immortalize themselves. wars are being fought by "apparitions cloaked as warriors" because aren't we all doomed to be apparitions in the end?
--the third stanza is showing how tyrannic wars are, not against their own nations, but against humans themselves. the fallacies humans have are about godlike power and immortality which will end in blood(war), "this is definite"... the ending the third stanza is how tangible and real the reality of no wars and truth really is
---the fourth stanza:
everyone wants immortality, everyone wants to be the greatest. but if "nobility, without persona, meets man" which means if highly authoritative figures talk to regular folks, you will find that every single person is the same and has the same needs and same fears( our ego is a veil). this is the a truth in the world that can create "infinity in the finite" which is an everlasting peace among people that are here for a short while(finite)
"A concrete fallacy" is an abstraction because we live in a world of fallacy but we think it is concrete.
--perhaps you should look to read through abstractions to offer me advice that will aid in my poetic future as opposed to limiting your mind to concrete things.
--This poem is about the fallacy that the world is teaching children is the right way(in this poem, i am going in opposition with this fallacy). such as racism, hatred, a fear of an authority, a fear of life in general.
the first stanza is basically "a bond of forsaken brotherhood" meaning the bond we have as humans is being forsaken, because of wars amongst other humans, as the "forsakeness"(abstraction) is riding along a shallow swampy river of blood "red slough" portraying blood spilled due to the forsaken bond...
--the second stanza begins by saying that the "uprooting of stability threatens to grab helm"...by this, i am offering light from the dark thoughts of this fallacy continuing endlessly by saying that to uproot the stablity(stability here meaning the state of fallacy that humans have been living in forever) threatens to take control of the "boat" going up the red slough. i am saying that the act of not living in the fallacy "threatens" to come into existence and change the fate of endless wars and bloodshed.
in the later lines, the words are portraying an image of battles humans have such as against nature, another human, and ourselves. it is a timeless battle because these battles have been obviously going since the beginning of time. the battle is pitted against mountain and sea because the fact that these battles have been going on for centuries and no victor has been declared...
how can one wield dreams of immortality? well speaking metaphorically, one can wield anything that he thinks will keep him alive during a battle, the only reason people wage wars is to be the greatest and immortalize themselves. wars are being fought by "apparitions cloaked as warriors" because aren't we all doomed to be apparitions in the end?
--the third stanza is showing how tyrannic wars are, not against their own nations, but against humans themselves. the fallacies humans have are about godlike power and immortality which will end in blood(war), "this is definite"... the ending the third stanza is how tangible and real the reality of no wars and truth really is
---the fourth stanza:
everyone wants immortality, everyone wants to be the greatest. but if "nobility, without persona, meets man" which means if highly authoritative figures talk to regular folks, you will find that every single person is the same and has the same needs and same fears( our ego is a veil). this is the a truth in the world that can create "infinity in the finite" which is an everlasting peace among people that are here for a short while(finite)
"A concrete fallacy" is an abstraction because we live in a world of fallacy but we think it is concrete.
--perhaps you should look to read through abstractions to offer me advice that will aid in my poetic future as opposed to limiting your mind to concrete things.