10-23-2014, 02:42 PM
(10-23-2014, 03:15 AM)billy Wrote: i like everything about this. the meter is spot on so are the rhymes. okay cannonball and dock are a bit off but i never noticed they were until i'd had a forth read ( i looking for it)
thanks for the chill
(10-14-2014, 01:09 PM)Wjames Wrote: Out of sweat, I swig my beer
and splash another rock;
one last blast of steam to sear
before I splash the dock.
Run then jump and cannonball
into the frigid lake;
climb out like an Elmo doll
that smiles and laughs and shakes.
Thanks for reading, I'm glad you liked it. I like the randomness of the Elmo doll, I wasn't sure if anyone else would.