What have we done..

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I like the extra editing Ryan_w_r suggested. I would like to suggest adjusted spacing and starting new lines. I think it will help a reader that may be unfamiliar with slam poetry sort out the tone of the poem. For instance I would change it like this:

Political unrest

Riots in our streets.

Circular wars

Scorched earth in the Middle East.

Mothers lying, babies to rest

Fathers resting in another woman's sheets.

Another child looses their life on the streets.

Media calls them "casualties of war"...

To me

More like casualties of greed.

Countless lives being lost over things we don't need.

See, what we NEED is an enlightened generation willing to plant a seed.

A seed that will grow in the mind of our youth, And come to fruition in the form of a society that knows only great love and truth.

Because what we have now, well, it doesn't work...

We are a pasteurized, preservative-filled prepackaged generation.

Graciously provided by media sponsors and major corporations...

I loved the poem overall. I hope I gave comprehensive feedback, as this is my very first posting