10-14-2014, 12:00 AM
(10-13-2014, 05:34 AM)gypsyrose Wrote: I think it should be "On some unnamed night and all will be bright". Then "The door will never close, the flowers will keep fragrant" Also maybe, "My children have fallen asleep most deeply" and "somebody will sing to them a cradle song"Thank you for the share. I've already answered to most of your comments. For me in the context of the poem the word "cant" is better than "sing". Greetings!
But I love the concept of your poem. Good Luck!
'Because the barbarians will arrive today;and they get bored with eloquence and orations.' CP Cavafy