10-11-2014, 06:05 PM
a lot better for this reader. a good way to edit is post the edit above the original poem using the words original and edit to show which is which. it allows the reader to easier see the changes.
would
most of all
work better on it's own line which would do away with the need for the comma?
another suggestion would be to
shorten the last line to:
when you cause my insanity
a good edit so far, the poem works much better with just the three you's
would
most of all
work better on it's own line which would do away with the need for the comma?
another suggestion would be to
shorten the last line to:
when you cause my insanity
a good edit so far, the poem works much better with just the three you's