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A summer's night (first draft)
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10-10-2014, 06:10 AM
The first line is a cliche but I think it works in this poem. It's a really well written and beautiful poem. My only suggestion is to change the line "it begins to dance" to something more poetic. Does it dance like something? does it dance with a particular style? Very good poem though!
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A summer's night (first draft) - by zahrakh - 09-11-2014, 03:03 AM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by rowens - 09-11-2014, 03:25 AM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by zahrakh - 09-12-2014, 05:43 PM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by billy - 09-12-2014, 06:08 PM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by zahrakh - 09-13-2014, 12:05 AM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by Erthona - 09-13-2014, 06:04 AM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by Mwaba don - 09-20-2014, 09:50 PM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by zahrakh - 09-21-2014, 01:50 AM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by Tamara - 09-21-2014, 02:44 PM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by Lysander Gray - 10-04-2014, 01:03 PM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by tectak - 10-06-2014, 05:16 PM
RE: A summer's night (first draft) - by oceanwanderer20 - 10-10-2014, 06:10 AM
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