In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl

In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl

simmon Offline

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10-07-2014, 07:57 PM

Lovely concept, but improve on the part when you introduce another guy might give the readers more sensation. I also feeling that the rhythm is not very good and the flow is not very smooth. In overall, I like the idea and I will looking forward to your next edit.

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In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by b.abraham - 10-07-2014, 08:47 AM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by Mwaba don - 10-07-2014, 09:09 AM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by b.abraham - 10-07-2014, 09:32 AM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by just mercedes - 10-07-2014, 10:50 AM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by b.abraham - 10-07-2014, 12:45 PM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by StanleyZ - 10-07-2014, 01:34 PM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by b.abraham - 10-07-2014, 02:25 PM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by just mercedes - 10-07-2014, 02:48 PM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by simmon - 10-07-2014, 07:57 PM

RE: In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl - by Muggler - 10-09-2014, 12:28 AM