In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl

[just mercedes]

Wow, thanks guys! I can't get over how great this feedback is! I think the next draft is going to be very boiled down. I'm going to read some more stuff elsewhere on forum and get some distance from The Coffeeshop Girl before I post anything new. Can anyone tell me what the etiquette on posting a second draft is? Should I edit my original, post a reply, or start a new thread?

We're encouraged to post the edit(s) above the first draft, so readers can follow the changes. We all learn by this!