10-03-2014, 01:10 PM
Peel is not simply used to rhyme. Mostly walls do break down, but this took time, years in fact, for what happened. In my mind, they more peeled away, brick my brick.
As to red and blue: Red is meaning the color of her hair, as well as the fire of my feelings toward her, Blue is her eyes, which is holds her depression, and sadness. When her hair covers her eyes, the seem to swirl together. These colors and emotions are specific to my relationship with her.
Now I'm not trying to shoot you down, I welcome any advice. I just wanted to explain how it was in my head, and what it means to me.
So maybe "swirl" instead of "swim" would be a better word for that part.
As to red and blue: Red is meaning the color of her hair, as well as the fire of my feelings toward her, Blue is her eyes, which is holds her depression, and sadness. When her hair covers her eyes, the seem to swirl together. These colors and emotions are specific to my relationship with her.
Now I'm not trying to shoot you down, I welcome any advice. I just wanted to explain how it was in my head, and what it means to me.
So maybe "swirl" instead of "swim" would be a better word for that part.