10-03-2014, 12:24 PM
This line "My walls, they seem to peel. " seems completely ad hoc, simply to rhyme with "real".
There are only two emotions? Blue would be depression and red would be anger. How about fear, loneliness, happy, joyous, et al. Plus you only mention them once. If one is going to use the title "Colors of Emotion", one should either add more colors or use a different title.
Welcome to the site,
Dale
There are only two emotions? Blue would be depression and red would be anger. How about fear, loneliness, happy, joyous, et al. Plus you only mention them once. If one is going to use the title "Colors of Emotion", one should either add more colors or use a different title.
Welcome to the site,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.