If Money Were a Man

[Snipesrock]

I'm bad at giving critiques and have been reading a lot of others(and the guide threads) to decide how I should, but I'll do my best here.

In the beginning about of it, I understand the main point.  As I read through though, the object of hate seems to fade to me.  The second to last stanza is clear about the feeling again, and the last line is indeed a good closer.  The repeated words make me want to skip by those lines as well.

If Money Were a Man



If money were a man I'd murder him in cold blood:
but I'd feel bad about it,
I'd go to church and confess it,
not being Catholic,
in front of the whole congregation;
and I wouldn't accept anyone's forgiveness.I'm not sure I understand this. I don't really know what to think about it.

I wouldn't go to prison.
I wouldn't let them take me alive;
I wouldn't kill for my right to be free,
but I wouldn't let them take me alive.Too repetitive to hold attention, subject becoming unclear.

I wouldn't die for it either,
there would be nothing they could do to me,
I wouldn't harm a soul:Not sure these lines continue with the theme as well and unsure as how they fit to the rest.

If you've ever seen Death Wish,
the way he felt about those men that raped and killed his wife and daughter:
That's the way I feel about money.I feel this is a great comparison to what the main subject, hate for something/someone, is.

If only there was a man I hated as much.